design plan

Sarah Danielson

Dr. Weilgos

College Writing 2

4/1/14

Design Plan

                I am going to do my research paper on Down syndrome. I am first going to write about how one gets Down syndrome, what happens to the body, and what happens to the brain. I am then going to talk about how those children go throughout their earlier lives, going through school, and dealing with any issues that they may overcome. Lastly, I will talk about what a Down syndrome person will/would have to do in order to survive in the average day when they are adults. I think that the audience will like my research paper, because it will informational and it will give insight on what they have to overcome in their life, and what they might have to deal with if they ever have a Down syndrome child. My argument will be that people with Down syndrome will not have to be taken care of for the rest of their lives, there are people, and programs that will help them accomplish whatever they want. My medium will be a paper, that will be only about Down syndrome. If I were to add anything to the paper it would probably be pictures but that is it. I think that being informed in a 8-10 page paper will be enough. I am going to use pathos throughout the paper; when talking about what the people have to go through and what they have to deal with day in and day out. I will use ethos, when using the facts that I get and making sure that they are written by professionals. I will use logos throughout when using the research that I get about the Down syndrome citizens.

Sarah Danielson

Dr. Wielgos

College Writing 2

3/25/14

Narrative

                My photo essay is about what the Down syndrome students do during class every day of school. The first picture I have is a picture of the classrooms chalkboard. On the chalk board there is a calendar and many other things, on my caption I tell how the students start their day and how what they learn to begin the day with. They learn how to read a calendar and make sure that they know what the day of the week is, making sure that they will be able to know how to tell what is going on outside. The second picture I have is a picture of the classroom as a full. I tell the audience that the students then learn  their reading, how and what they do to make sure that they will become good readers in the future. In the classroom the students learn how to read signs, this is great for the future because they will be able to go shopping, walk across the street at the right time, or maybe even drive a car. The third picture I have is a picture of the student cubbyholes that show a lot of paper. Making sure that the readers understand that they also work on their writing and making sure that they will be good writer in the future and what they can do with those writings in the future. They teach the students when they get older how to write checks, fill out applications, make sure that they are prepared to maybe live on their own one day. The fourth picture is a picture of the computers that they use on a regular basis. The computers are used for all subject and it will help them in the future to get a job. Millions of people use technology every day, learning technology is one of the most important aspects into getting a job now a days. The fifth photo is a photo of the kitchen, showing that the students learn more than the average student does each day. They also learn how to cook for themselves. They learn how to make snacks, mac & cheese, and anything that they would like to learn. This is a key aspect in their classroom because teachers want them to be able to survive on their own if they have to. The sixth photo is a picture of the laundry machines. They make sure that the students learn how to do their own laundry. They need to be able to make sure, that they will be able to have clean clothes on their back at all times, and if their parents cannot do it, than they will be able to. The seventh photo is a picture of their nook area-showing math on the wall. I want the reader to notice that they work with money so in the future they will be able to take care of themselves without anyone really helping the whole time. Money is very important to people, and learning how to count money is a very important aspect to have, when getting a job, you might need to be able to count money, and the teachers want them to be able to do that to get a job in the future. The last picture is a picture of the student’s folders and area to get their things for the day, ending the photo essay on that the students learn science at the end of the day. Science is a fun learning for the students, they learn about animals and plant, and then they grow plants as well. I hope that the reader feels a little during the essay, feeling maybe a little joy to know that these students will be able to one day live on their own and not have to be taken care of by everyone that they know. I hope that they take from this photo essay that Down syndrome children can do whatever they want if they have a good classroom and good staff that will help them out, then they will be able to do whatever they want in life. I think that it is good for those students to get those opportunities in life. If I was a Down syndrome student, I think that I would be glad to get these opportunities because I think that I would feel more normal and make sure that people would not look after me as much and get more freedom. Make my parents proud that I could do so much. I feel like if I ever have a Down syndrome child, I will be happy that I have good schools out there that make sure my child will get as many opportunities as the next.


Photo Essay

 

The Average day of a Down syndrome Student at School

After getting off the bus and eat their breakfast, the students with Down syndrome go to their classroom. When first getting in their classroom, the students work on calendar, what the day is, what tomorrow will be, and what yesterday was. They go through the months of the year and the days of the week.

      

 

After going through the calendar, the kids start on reading. They review their letters and sounds. They blend sounds to make words. They read stories that entertain them and that are at their reading level. They also work on how to read safety signs, like the stop signs, restroom signs.

 

 

After reading, they work on their writing. They normally write about what they read for that day. They work on their name, address, and their phone numbers, because this will help them in the future.

 

They use computers during reading, math and writing. There are special programs that help make sure they are getting better. When the students are in eighth grade, the students learn how to fill out job applications. They also use programs to work on their sight vocabulary.

       

 

Every day of the week the students learn how make different kinds of food. They make snacks like popcorn, pop tarts, different sandwiches, and anything that is basic that they can make when they are hungry. One day a week, they teach the students how to make bigger meals, like macaroni and cheese, pizzas, pancakes, and soup with grilled cheese.

 

      

 

A couple of times a week they learn how to do their own laundry. They each get different jobs, like one-person sorts the clothes, and another person measures the amount of laundry detergent they should put into their washing machine.

Throughout the day, the students also work on their math. They learn how to identify numbers, they will put the number of objects with the number, and they will work with money. They learn how to add and subtract, some work with multiples. Other things they work on are telling time, counting change, the dollar over strategy. 

 

 

At the end of the day, the students work on their science skills. They learn about plants, they grow plants, they learn about animals, and learn about space, with the planets and the moon. Then they go back to their bus to go home for the day.

 

Work cited

Danielson, Sarah. (2014). Figure 1. Joliet, IL.

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 2. Joliet, IL.

 

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 3. Joliet, IL.

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 4. Joliet, IL.

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 5. Joliet, IL.

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 6. Joliet, IL.

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 7. Joliet, IL

Danielson, S. (2014). Figure 8. Joliet, IL.

 

 

 

 

 

My experience with the photo essay.

I do not have any really bad issues with the photo essay, I mean I couldn't take any pictures of actual Down syndrome children, because it is illegal. So all I have is pictures of the classroom, which kind of sucks that they are not really good pictures. Also I did not take enough I guess. When my mom and I were going through what the students went through everyday we did not really talk about some of the cool things that the student do as well. It was a little disappointing when I found out. I also did not realize if I was supposed to put all of this on to a power point or if it could just be on a actual work document. When doing the rough draft, I did not think that it was really challenging, maybe just a little frustrating. I could not really come up with any questions and that is why I just basically tell as story, and the only people that I could think about that would even what to read/look at my photo essay would be maybe teachers that cant teach to see how a good classroom is run or maybe like the parents that actually wanted to just read my paper to learn what their child will learn on an average week of school. I also think that I is a great job what that school does with the Down syndrome students. They really teach them things that will make them one day able to get a job, work, maybe move out of their parents homes. Really be able to live like a normal human. This will also help the parents in the future because they will realize that they can have a life in the future and that they would not have to make sure that they are always worried about their child every waking moment of the day. I hope that the photo essay will show everything that I want it to show. There are probably parts of my wording in some of the sentences that probably sound like crap, but thank God that right now it is only the rough draft!
I hope that the my essay changes throughout the paper. I think that pathos is used throughout, just having it be about students in general always gets peoples emotions. I think that ethos is used when talking about what the students learn each day in the classroom. I think that logos is used when telling the audience examples of what the students learn throughout the day like how to make a pizza.
I think that the narrative does proved the audience with more understanding of the picture. I think that goes through all photo essays because without them then it would not even become an essay it would be pictures. I think that pictures are worth a thousand words to different people, so without the words that the author puts with the picture people might think that my essay is about going from school to home.

 

Sarah Danielson

Dr. Wielgos

College Writing II

2/16/14

Leukemia

One day in March, a five-year-old boy named Tommy came home from school not feeling well. His mother and father took him to the doctors thinking that it was just a cold. However, when the doctor heard the symptoms, he decided to do a blood test to make sure it was not anything more than a cold. A week later, Tommy went back to the doctor to get the results of the blood test.  The doctor told Tommy’s parents that Tommy had Acute Lymphoblastic Leukemia. They knew it was bad, but the doctor could only tell them so much. When learning about a disease, people tend to ask their doctors for information or they research online. The sites are set up for people to learn about diseases and sometimes to donate money to the organization to help people that have that disease.  People go to the websites to get comfort in understanding what they or their loved ones will be going through. These websites also bring information to those who want to help. I am going to analyze the effectiveness of the ethos, logos, pathos, and the visual/text that is on the website http://www.lls.org/.

                      Leukemia is a type of disease that effects the blood and bone marrow. It develops when blood cells grow uncontrollably in the spongy part of the bone. There are many types of Leukemia, which are named by the type of cells that are being effected throughout the body. The Leukemia that starts with Acute, is normally the most dangerous out of the different Leukemia’s. Four of the most common Leukemia’s are:  Acute Myeloid Leukemia, Chronic Myeloid Leukemia, Acute Lymphoblastic Leukemia, and Chronic Lymphocytic Leukemia. People with all kinds of Leukemia are treated every day; but also every day, many are diagnosed with a type of Leukemia.

           
            Throughout the website logos is a big factor. In the website, you can easily reach an area that will tell you all about your disease. When talking about Leukemia, the website tells you how Leukemia starts and some of the different types of Leukemia. The website tells the reader the signs and symptoms of the different types of Leukemia and how they effect the body. However, for some types of Leukemia they do not know as much about. The website explanations are short and to the point, with not as much detail as some readers might like. In the website you can find out how some doctors treat the Leukemia itself and some of the medicines and symptoms that you might experience while trying to get better. It shows phone numbers, chat groups and email addresses that you can contact to get even more help if needed and to get more information about the disease. The website shows the reader how well the doctors have been treating the diseases and how all the new technology is making it easier on the patients that are being treated.  It also shows the negative side effects.  For instance, some diseases that affect children under the age of two, will not have a great chance for survival. This can be hard for some to read if their child is under the age of two, but it can also be refreshing that they are being honest with the reader when showing all of the facts about the disease.

Ethos is used throughout the website. When opening up the website, areas are shown where you can contact doctors with any questions. Showing that they have full doctor support throughout the website, helps the reader know that it is credible. When clicking on a side bar you can find information about the website itself and who is in control of the foundation all together. This assures the reader that they can trust the website when making donations and anything else that they might need. Ethos is also used when the webpage says that they have people to talk to on the phone or on the web chat, to get more information that you might need about the sickness that you or someone you know has.

In the website, pathos can be seen everywhere. Throughout the website, the reader can always see the donate button. The donate button is not as big as the information button, but it is still noticeable. When clicking on the donations button, the website will explain why to donate as well as the other ways you can donate your money toward the people with these blood diseases. When you click on the donate button you can also look at pictures of some of the people you will be helping. In this picture, you see a 22-month-old girl named Madalyn, who has acute lymphoblastic leukemia. At the bottom of her story, there is a button to click if you choose to donate money to help her. There are many other people that you can donate money to on the website, age ranging from babies to grandparents. Showing that at any age, people can get Leukemia and anyone can help. Using pathos really helps the audience in that way.  By showing them the picture of the baby girl, it touches people’s emotions because it is a sick child. When showing that it is an older person, the audience feels emotions when realizing that it could affect their parents, siblings, or friends.

The visual and text aspect of the website brings the reader wanting to know more. When you first open the page, you see nothing but pictures throughout the opening page. All of the words are in red, white, or yellow which stand out to a black background. The readers notice two visuals right away. One of the biggest visual is a red blood drop on a black background, with the words “Donate now, you can change the world”. Using pathos, when telling the reader that they can change the world with just donating blood. The second visual that catches the eye of the reader is a picture with a girl on it with her hand up facing the audience. One the side of the picture you see another hand that is completely red, with white words saying, “Cancer Ends With Me”. This also makes the audience feel emotion when trying to make them feel better, by saying that you will get over your cancer and survive. The clear writing of the words makes them eye popping so there is no reason that the reader could not see them. Visual and text make a big difference when it comes to getting the audience’s attention.

In conclusion, when analyzing the website it showed:  logos, ethos and pathos. It uses visual and text to make an impact when getting the audience to stay and trust the website. When looking at the information about the different types of Leukemia, the author uses logos to make sure that everyone who reads the website’s information, knows that it is true. The website also uses ethos when it allows you to contact different doctors and people who have had the disease. They give enough information about the professionals so that you are always cared for throughout your time in need. When showing the donation buttons and the pictures of the sick children and elderly, the website uses a lot of pathos. This is in hopes that when you see the pictures and get to know the people and their stories, then you will want to donate to the organization. The visual and text really help the audience want to know more about how they can help and how they can get help. I think that the website shows Leukemia how it is.  It is a very scary disease to have and I believe that this website is trying to help those patients out. Tommy’s parents were very happy that they were able to get information online to help better understand what Tommy would be going through. Throughout his treatment, they always knew to be aware of symptoms and anything that could affect his treatment. Once Tommy was healthy again, he grew up to be a healthy young man.

 

How the name came

If you are reading this then you are probably thinking, Dorkus Fern?? Why would you name anything Dorkus Fern? Well that is one of my nicknames with my family. If you haven't seen the movie "Seven Bride for Seven Brother" then I think you are missing out on a little bit of movie history. But it is basically about seven brides for seven brothers, no joke. One of the brides for one of the brothers was named Dorkus Fern. She has brown eyes, brown hair, tall and is very pretty. When I was a baby, my family thought that was a great nick name for me because they wanted me to look like her when I got older. Well I think that my family was right on who I look like in the movie. I have brown hair, brown eyes and I'm taller than the average height of females. I'm not going to say if I'm pretty or not because I believe that it is a matter of opinion. So if you think it is interesting reading what I write and what to know what I kind of look like, then I would say watch Seven Brides for Seven Brothers!